Fan Fiction Review

Cyan's Song

 timho rated this and wrote this review on January 26, 2019:

The stunningly attractive Cyan Starling is Jabba’s prized bounty hunter. However, little does she know that Jabba has replaced her with the best bounty hunter in the galaxy – Boba Fett. Now, she finds herself in a tight spot. If she does not capture the next bounty Jabba has sent her after, she will be forced to become one of Jabba’s slave girls. Jabba sends Fett to accompany her on this bounty, and now Fett finds himself watching over a hunter that has skills almost equal to his – also, he is struggling to hold down a new emotion – love.

Cyan’s Song has many qualities of a well-written story – excellent atmospheric description, and fairly good characterization. Amos’ use of description in Cyan’s Song is marvelous – she has concentrated on painting a mouth-watering picture of the lovely Cyan in our minds, and has succeeded. She has also used the interesting method of inserting songs in periodically; songs that relate to what has happened to that point in the story – very creative.

Tasha Amos mentions that this is only Part I of the story – Part II will be looked forward to. However, there are some things to look out for. It seems that Cyan’s Song has very little punctuation, especially the use of commas. Also, Amos tends to repeat herself from time to time – solving both of these errors are easy – have someone proofread your story. Amos has the potential of a very good writer – however, a writer must find a balance. Amos has put way too much romance in this novel, and does not concentrate enough on adding the flavor of Star Wars into the story – whether it be space battles, or blaster fights. Finding a balance between action and romance is critical in a story not meant to be in the category of romance. However, I do understand that there is a Part II, and perhaps the climax and action of the fan fiction takes place there.

Here is a brief excerpt from Tasha Amos’ Cyan’s Song to give you a taste.

"You must be tired." Cyan’s speech got softer and more soothing until it was almost a purr. "Very, very tired, so tired you can barely stay awake. Don’t try." she watched Fett intently. His helmeted head was beginning to nod sleepily and his breathing was so faint that if she hadn’t been listening for it, she wouldn’t have noticed it subtly becoming deeper and more relaxed, the breathing of someone in a very deep trance. "Sleep Boba Fett, sleep deeply hearing only the sound of my voice. You hear only my voice and you will obey."

"I will..obey." Fett’s voice through the Mandalorian helmet’s speakers was as harsh and emotionless as ever, but seemed to be murmured, as if he were talking in his sleep, a sure sign that he was completely under her spell. Cyan didn’t take any pride in her victory though, if anything she became more grim. "You will tell me what I want to know Fett." she said firmly "What is Jabba paying you to do? What has he told you that he hasn’t told me?" The other hunter didn’t respond and her tone became more urgent, almost desperate "Tell me Fett, what you are doing here."

"I’ve got a better idea." Fett’s voice was strong, alert, and completely in control, without a trace of drowsy obedience, the last thing a would-be hypnotist wanted to hear. "You will tell me what you think You’re doing."

Cyan’s eyes widened for the briefest of moments, than she regained her composure. "It appears that I have underestimated you Fett." she said smoothly "Very few sentients have the will to resist Lorelei mesmerism. I’m impressed."

"I’m flattered," Fett said dryly and aimed his rifle directly at her head.

Tasha should consider publishing some romantic novels, as that seems to be what she enjoys writing about – and what she is extremely talented at. This is a very good story on the whole, and Tasha, we’ll be waiting for the sequel! Ok people, read this story soon…

Reviewer’s note: This fan fiction contains mature content that may not be suitable for minors.