1 Topic by Devin Jax (edited by Devin Jax Wednesday, October 10, 2007 1:27 pm)

Topic: Jaster Miqaurie first shot

heres a character i whipped up who is bounty hunter very cool got a 4+ at school for it in grade 6 last year


                In the hot plains of tatooine a ship lands in a landing bay of an old cantina bar when a fat slug slides up to the ship."welcome"he said,the name is gurger gurger the hutt. A man in raddy looking armor walks out of the ship.

"Names Jaster Miqaurie, im looking for a job."

"Bah u wnt to be my bounty hunter .HO HO HO...You want to work for me huh?Hmmmmmmm get this bounty or hunt as u most hunters say...

"looks a bit easy "

why do u think its easy its ur first hunt...door nob.....People call him artemis hangs out so most people say...HMMMM...........oh Mos Eisley yah that sounds right.
Jaster thought to him self for a minute  and turnedaround to his ship and started walking.

Hey were u going

Jaster climbed into his ship.BRAAM!!!!! BRAAAM!!!!!!!Jaster came out of his ship on a hovering swoop bike with a big bantha skull on the side.He zoomed away out towards a black spot in the horizon...........Mos Eisley...



do u like the first chapter theres alot more but my hand was starting to get sore frome typing ... well the rest is pretty much all action death thrills all the good stuff so if u want to read more tell me

Ryan vanvulkangoedwell miss you bud your gone to heavan and you will be missed...Jared and Jacob your brothers...think of this not a good bye but a see you later.....and ill bring the beers! :?

Re: Jaster Miqaurie first shot

its sounds good, but I think you might need to work on your punctuation and grammar, I had a bit of a hard time understanding some of it.

"Ke barjurir gar'ade, jagyc'ade kot'la a dalyc'ade kotla'shya."--
Train your sons to be strong, and your daughters to be stronger.

Re: Jaster Miqaurie first shot

sorry about that i guess i never did spell check it lol lol lol lol thers alot more too actually 3 and a half whole pages...........its actually all the action in the next pages ill post it up on friday tomorrow

Ryan vanvulkangoedwell miss you bud your gone to heavan and you will be missed...Jared and Jacob your brothers...think of this not a good bye but a see you later.....and ill bring the beers! :?

Re: Jaster Miqaurie first shot

I understand bad spelling, i realy do, I dont have a working Microsoft Word, so i cat use spellcheck, but "u" is not a word. Interesting concept. Please work on capitalization, and punctuation, and grammer.

[i]The man in black fled across the desert, and the gunslinger followed[/i]
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Re: Jaster Miqaurie first shot

yah i was only donig that bffc so it would be quicker to type because im a slow typer

Ryan vanvulkangoedwell miss you bud your gone to heavan and you will be missed...Jared and Jacob your brothers...think of this not a good bye but a see you later.....and ill bring the beers! :?

Re: Jaster Miqaurie first shot

lol i can spellcheck if u want.

Re: Jaster Miqaurie first shot

sure u can do that if u want Fett 2

Ryan vanvulkangoedwell miss you bud your gone to heavan and you will be missed...Jared and Jacob your brothers...think of this not a good bye but a see you later.....and ill bring the beers! :?

Re: Jaster Miqaurie first shot

You should keep going, its a pretty interesting idea..........

[i]The man in black fled across the desert, and the gunslinger followed[/i]
[url=http://lfgcomic.com/page/1]Interrogations are hard...[/url]

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