Topic: My story (So far)

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AvatarMember #22
January 11, 2007 7:02 pm (Edited January 11, 2007 07:03 pm) #

Ok, so this is not about Boba, but it is about Spartans (Master Chief)
I have not even begin to write this, Much mopre will follow


Prologue


Kevin had just emptied his last MA5B clip. “Crap! I’m out!” Kevin yelled  “Hear! Its my last one!” Rebekah yelled. Kevin could not believe that he had gone through 400 rounds already. “I must have killed at least 200 grunts already” Kevin thought, taking careful aim at his next target. An explosion rocked Rebekah and Kevin. Rebekah looked around, and saw a mortar round hit second squad’s position. “Second squad is gone Kevin! We have to get out of here!” Rebekah said. Kevin looked up from the foxhole they were in. He saw hundreds of Covenant coming. “Lets get out of here! Kevin said “All Spartans Retreat now!” He said over the TEAMCOM. He saw twenty green winks. “Rebekah call for extraction now! Kevin ordered. He got a green wink from Rebekah. “They are picking us up at 3-2-9-5” Rebekah said. “Lets move out Spartans!” Kevin ordered. He only got seventy winks this time. Kevin looked up one more time before he ran. Omega team was in an intense firefight. “Kevin! Get the rest of the Spartans out of here!” Omegas team leader said. Kevin ordered all of the Spartans to head to the forest to the rear, and head to the extraction point. Kevin got up and ran as fast as he could, he saw Rebekah right next to him. He looked to his left and saw ten Spartans running along with them. He looked to his right, and saw seven, no five, Spartans running with him now. The two Spartans that had been killed had been hit with a mortar. They made it into the forest and kept running at a little bit slower rate. They ran for about three hundred meters till they got to the extraction point where three Pelican drop ships were waiting for them. They all piled into the Pelican’s and the back hatch’s closed.

Tell me what you think.

January 11, 2007 11:39 pm #

Not bad, but I suggest you start a new paragraph each time a different character speaks.

Sounds like a promising start to a good story.

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AvatarMember #22
January 12, 2007 8:54 am #

I'll do that. Thanks

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