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November 20, 2006 6:01 pm #

I wrote this a long time ago and before you start...I know, it's very crumby.





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Commander Cody Raised his rangefinder, inserting it swiftly in his helment.The remains of Uthapa burned a blaze in the night sky.Order Sixty Six still stood. Kill all Jedi. He filled his lungs letting out a relentless sigh. Was he sorry for what he'd done?, should he be?.


Turning on a Friend, Firing on him as he attempted to escape. Should he be sorrowed for doing his Job?. He could hear heavy footsteps approching." Sir." Said a voice very simalur to his own. Cody turned rapidly almost ramming into his Trooper Captain." Any sign of Kenobi?." He asked Sternly, with a unfaltering gaze. The Captain shook his head." No Sir, orders?." Cody let his gaze fall but it quickly regained." Get you men to a Transport, Move it!." The Captain snapped to attention." Yes Sir!." He saluted almost without thinking. Cody casully return his gesture and returned to the balcany. Genaral Kenobi was Dead. He had carried out his orders. Yet why did he regret it?. It was his Job. He had killed before without a second thought. Why did this hurt.



Inside a flame of Conflict and Confussion sprouted. He was the enemy. He told himself. He was a betrayer. He felt his Deece which hung fasten to his Bandaler. He deserved to die. He switched his comlink channel with a rapid blink." Captain, Requesting private Transport tonight." The Battle hardened voice of his Captain rushed through the Comlink." Yes Sir, Right away Sir!." Cody let his Comlink Switch off again before sliding into a uncontroled slump. He let his head fall back against the balcany wall. His helment scrapped against the rough surface leaving fresh new scratches on his faded yellow helment. He popped the seal and lifted the helment from his battered head. He rolled it around in his hands despite the electronics that could come loose from lack of care. His cold gaze fell upon the darken T shaped Slit.

The Uthapa Moon Cast a glow bouncing his reflection back at him. For once all he saw was a eleven year old forced into the world to fight for a senate he knew nothing about, nor where they stood in the diplamatic world. He finally took notice of the Scar that ran clean across from his right eye. And with that Scar was a Memory......

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There is more to the Story, and i will post the rest as soon as i can...namely as soon as i finish it. :D

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
November 21, 2006 12:13 pm #

Very good! Keep it going! :)

"Die? Didn't you know that Spartans never die?'- Spartan-051 "Kurt"
November 21, 2006 3:00 pm #

Thank you, here's a little more.....



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GEONOSIS...
Day 10.....






"Genareal Kenobi!, we're pinned down in the east point, requesting asistanse!." Commander Cody cries of destress echoed through the canyons of Geonosis. His comlink was jammed. Droids were filling the remainder of the area more quickly than expected. A nearby exploision forced him and his men to fall prone. Flash bangs flew through the air landing a calculated thirty cenameters away."Don't look Directly at the Blast!." He shouted seconds before it exploded, but it still dazed him for a moment. The HUD (Heads up display) in his in-built computer flashed showing him multiple hostiles charging from the south point." Oh Fierfek!, men fall back, I repeat fall back!." The sound of clips falling and the thunder of his men sent shivers up his spine. He fired one last shot before following.



He came jogging up beside a Young clone private. " Just think Sir." He said in short breaths." We've been holed up in that postion for weeks." Cody's voice shook from the impact of his feet struggling to stay upright in the loose sand of Geonosis." Positivity isn't always a good thing, Private." He said in a commanding voice he only used under fire." This in the most important battle in history, and we're running!." " But Sir.." The Private argued. "Shut up and Run."  Cody Said. Another brillent shot fired dangerously close to his head, leaving a steaming mark carved across his armor. From above a shattered Gunship came tumbling down before them." Men, head towards that downed Ship." Cody Yelled. Forcing all his weight onto hands, he flew over the crater caused by the crash. Sliding down halfway he quickly struggled to free himself of the lose dirt. Grabbing his Deece, he fired a couple a shots, before ducking from return fire." When did these Droids get so intelligent?." His Captain complained." I don't care, just shoot!." Cody shouted, destroying another droid." Incoming Bugs!." Whiping around, he shoved his deece hard into the chest of a Geonosisan warrior. It muttered in surprise. But didn't get a chance to force the barrel away. Cody kicked the dead bug away, returning to the Battle at hand." Kenobi, requesting imediate asistance, heavy casulties." Cody cried again. He was becomeing irattated.

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
November 22, 2006 1:31 pm #

Still good! I'm anxious to see where this goes! :)

"Die? Didn't you know that Spartans never die?'- Spartan-051 "Kurt"
November 25, 2006 6:50 pm #

It's good, but here's a few tips. You should start a new paragraph when a different character speaks. Also if you use a question mark or exclamation mark you don't need to put a full stop (or period as American's say) after it. The marks have the same effect. Hope this helps. ;)

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It was like thousands of voices cried out for a sequel and were suddenly silenced...
November 28, 2006 7:38 am #

not bad not bad, i like where its going, although cody seems a pretty common sounding name for a clone commander. if your interested give my fanfic a read, "The Beginning of The End, Story of The 101st MSB" im always looking for input.

"I'm just a simple man trying to make my way in the universe"
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November 28, 2006 8:46 am #

Looken good, I like it.

November 28, 2006 6:42 pm #

" Kenobi, respond." Nothing. Then a familer voice rattled through the speaker of his helment."

This is Kenobi, What's the matter Commander? You can't fight a few parisites."

" Sir, We're pinned down seven clicks from our RV point. Requesting Jedi astistance."

Silence.

" I'll see what i can do Commander."

I don't know how long we can hold our line. Cody thought. A sudden cry in agony caused a second of cease fire in the battle. Blood spattered Cody's armor as his Captain came squrming down on across his the back of his legs. Pulling free of the weight, Cody started barking out orders.

" Private, give me cover fire."

He grabbed the Rifle from the Dead body of the Captain and procceded to climb the hull of the Gunship. Swinging his legs across onto the wings, he kneeled shouldering the stock. More blaster fire stuck his armor. Cody's return fire seared a flaming hole into the Droid's Sensors, causing a data overload. More return fire. A nearby Blast threw him from the wings. Blinded he scurried inside. He soon relized he was back to back with his clone private.

" Do you think will ever see Kamino again, Sir?."

He asked. Cody never imagined never returning home. He drew a sharp breath.

" Fight your best Trooper." He said finally. Suddenly Blaster fire showered them. His Private dared to fire back. Cody tried his com in distress." Kenobi, under heavy fire, where are......" A piercing sqeal caused him to throw the helment from his head.




They've fried our comms.  He struggled to see through the thick sand that had risen into the air. Then a sudden force hit him from above. He felt a sharp object rip clean across his eye. A blinding light caused him to fall backwards. Blinking rapidly, he saw the Private standing over a Dead Geonosisan warrior.

" You okay, sir?." He asked.

" Just a little beaten." Cody said. Taking the offered hand, he stood. Missles flew through the air. They dropped, firing on the garrison. More droids. A stray bolt seared the Private's shoulder. Cody fell back against the bulkhead. More DROIDS. Alot more droids than expected.

Do you think we'll ever see Kamino again?. Flashed in his mind. Enough motavation as any to keep fighting. He eyed his helment, which lay across from him. Moving swiftly, he grabbed it. He placed it on his head once more." Better to have protection." Soon he added another motavation. He wanted to see Eleven. He was GOING to see eleven. He tried despertly to hold off the advance. By now he had been forced beyond the gunship. His Deece clicked. Cody looked grimly down at his ammo bar." Dry." He swallowed hard, ejecting his last known weapon. His viroblade. If he was going to die, he wanted to take a few down with him. He stared fearlessly at the upcoming droids.
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Well, it took long enough. :D
The next part will take a few days.
It's the part that i haven't written yet, but i will.

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
AvatarMember #22
November 28, 2006 7:59 pm #

Omg, this is great! I love it! keep it up man! you rock.

November 28, 2006 10:22 pm #

Ditto to that. We await more! :D

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November 29, 2006 5:07 pm (Edited November 29, 2006 05:48 pm) #

Letting out a confident shout, he pushed forward. He jabbed his Viroblade hard into electical wiring. The Droids would stutter and come to a stop. But, Cody couldn't falter yet. He imediately attacked another, this time he aimed for the chest-plates. He almost saw his life flash before his eyes, as short as it was. Another stray bolt managed to hit it's target. Cody stumbled, but didn't fall. He drove on, fighting not only for freedom. He was fighting for his life.


But, every punch he threw. Every Droid he destroyed, Another always took it's place. His whole body ached from fighting and blaster bolts.

" Halt," The Droid Commanded, " We've got you surrounded."

" Dream on!." Cody said, slamming his blade into the face of the droid.

The others looked around unsure as of what to do next. The sound of engines answered that question for them. Cody jumped out of the way just in time as Green laser rained from the sky. When he glanced back at the Garrison they were reduced to rubble. He struggled to see the Gunship as it landed in a clearing not to far-away.

" Commander Cody." Kenobi said sliding from the deck.

Cody felt like he could faint from relief, but he saluted instead." What took so long? I thought i'd have to fight this war myself."

The two stopped to shake hands. Kenobi shrugged.

" I thought i'd play it a a little close." He laughed.

" A little too close for my liking, General." Cody Said removing his helment.

Suddenly, Cody remembered the brave Clone Private. He stared grimly at the Medic," How is he? "

The Medic paused," He'll be okay." He eyed Cody's scar," You'd better tend to that."

" I will."

He turned to Kenobi," Make sure the Private gets a good rank in the GAR."

A humorious smile crossed Kenobi's face." Now, when have i ever let you down? "

Cody shook his head, returning the smile." Don't remind me."
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" Sir," A voice rang in his speakers." Lord Vader says we move out tonight." Cody shook his head and replaced his helment.

" No private transport, huh? Alright, saddle up men we're moving out."

Cody would never forget his good friend Kenobi, and this would be one of his deepest regrets. But he had a job to do, and it was his duty to do it.
Cody glanced off the side-rail, down into Uthapa's pits.

" I'm sorry, old buddy. This was just buisness, nothing personal."

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Sorry, it wasnt' that great. I had hoped for a better ending, but this was all i could come up with.

Sooooo, the line to kick my butt starts........Here! > ____________________ :D :D :D :D :D :D :D

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
November 29, 2006 6:12 pm #

i can see it going farther then that lol maybe some more flashbacks from the clone wars. other then that good work!

"I'm just a simple man trying to make my way in the universe"
November 29, 2006 6:18 pm #

Don't worry, i've been thinking about a sequel. You know?.

I'll see if i can come up with another chapter, don't worry. But it will take awhile...and believe me. I HAVE GOT A WHILE. :D

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
November 29, 2006 6:21 pm #

definently, i've been writing my story for almost 4 years! and im still not done lol the more ideas you get the more you want to write

"I'm just a simple man trying to make my way in the universe"
November 29, 2006 9:58 pm #

At least i'm not alone. :D

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
November 30, 2006 6:26 am (Edited November 30, 2006 06:26 am) #

def. your not lol check out my story, its right below yours lol "The Beginning of The End, Story of the 101st MSB"  keep it up i wanna hear that sequal soon!

"I'm just a simple man trying to make my way in the universe"
November 30, 2006 3:26 pm #

Here's a Teaser for the Sequal.
The story will be called " Unusal Allies "
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" Hello, Commander. I'm intrested to know if you've heard of any rifts in the Jedi Temple Recently. We are unable to make a connection with the Counsel."

So, she didn't know of the prior events.

" No, ma'am." Cody said plainly, trying not to cause question. " We to have been away from the sector for great amounts of time and have heard nothing."

Clueless Jedi.

" Commander, Requesting that you're course be diverted to Corasaunt. We have to find out whats going on."

" Yes, ma'am. Right away ma'am."

Cody took a step back.

" Open fire."
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P.S I got a Email from Karen Traviss :D :D :D :D

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
November 30, 2006 4:48 pm #

augh! that was great, i need to read more of it! lol that was almost cruel the way you stopped it right after "Open Fire"

"I'm just a simple man trying to make my way in the universe"
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November 30, 2006 5:09 pm #

.... This will be good. What was your email about?

November 30, 2006 9:19 pm #

I asked her how long Kaminaons live. Mostly because my dad's been hounding me to write storied for i forget how long. :D

As for the Fanfiction... Wait intill December 5. Even though i already have the first two parts waiting.

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
December 2, 2006 5:11 pm #

That was great and I loved it.

Sa kyr'am Nau tracyn kad, Vode an.-Forged like the saber in the fires of death,brothers all.
December 2, 2006 5:14 pm #

Thank you, Kandosii Fett. :D

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
December 2, 2006 5:16 pm #

No problem ner vod.

Sa kyr'am Nau tracyn kad, Vode an.-Forged like the saber in the fires of death,brothers all.
December 2, 2006 5:58 pm #

I've always been a little " On edge " about posting my Fanfiction, because i was afraid that nobody would like it.

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
December 2, 2006 6:10 pm #

Trust me ner vod you are a great writer. You shouldn't be afraid to post your work. You are among friends here especially me ner vod. Every one on this site is yours and my Vode Darasuum.

"Ke nu'jurkadir sha Mando'ade.-Don't mess with Mandalorians."-Kandosii Fett

Sa kyr'am Nau tracyn kad, Vode an.-Forged like the saber in the fires of death,brothers all.
December 2, 2006 6:13 pm (Edited December 2, 2006 06:14 pm) #

Thank you ner'vod

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
December 2, 2006 6:25 pm #

I would do anything for my ner vod. If we were in a fire fight I would jump in front of the blast for you especially or any of our other ner vod.Vode Darasuum.

"Ke nu'jurkadir sha Mando'ade.-Don't mess with Mandalorians."-Kandosii Fett

Sa kyr'am Nau tracyn kad, Vode an.-Forged like the saber in the fires of death,brothers all.
December 2, 2006 6:28 pm #

Wow..... No one has ever said anything like that to me before... Thank you.

BTW I just have another external hardrive dropped of with me and it has a few unfinished stories on it. I'm wondering if i should post them.

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
December 2, 2006 6:52 pm #

As I have said you should post what you have you are the greatest person I have ever met you are the greatest ner vod ever and you are officially family to me.And I will stick up and fight for you.We will truly bear the worlds weight together we are Mandalorians and the great Mando'ade say family more than bloodlines.I am not logging off yet but before we do part I just wanted to say good night ner vod.Vode Darasuum,truly.

Sa kyr'am Nau tracyn kad, Vode an.-Forged like the saber in the fires of death,brothers all.
December 2, 2006 6:58 pm #

Like i said. Nobody has ever said anything like that to me before.

Good night Ner'vod.

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
December 2, 2006 7:31 pm #

Ner Vod as I said good night and by the way if you ever need to leave your yaim my yaim is your yaim.Vode Darasuum.
P.S. Yaim means home.
P.S.S. I love you ner vod for you truly are family.

Sa kyr'am Nau tracyn kad, Vode an.-Forged like the saber in the fires of death,brothers all.
December 2, 2006 7:37 pm #

Um, okay..... :D

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
December 3, 2006 1:15 pm #

Ner Vod you are a friend and family so I will treat you and look out for you like family does.

Sa kyr'am Nau tracyn kad, Vode an.-Forged like the saber in the fires of death,brothers all.
December 3, 2006 1:24 pm #

Kandosii Fett! You're BACK! It's been lonely here without you. :D

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
December 3, 2006 1:29 pm (Edited December 3, 2006 01:30 pm) #

I'm glad to be back ner vod. I had an appointment with a Hut'uun today that unfortuneately he couldn't miss:=D

Sa kyr'am Nau tracyn kad, Vode an.-Forged like the saber in the fires of death,brothers all.
December 3, 2006 1:34 pm #

Such is life.

I kept myself entertained by searching for Avatars, again. :D

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
December 3, 2006 1:40 pm #

I can see.Well ner vod ive been waiting to get on all day long.

Sa kyr'am Nau tracyn kad, Vode an.-Forged like the saber in the fires of death,brothers all.
December 3, 2006 1:44 pm #

I've been waiting for you to get on all day long.
Sundays. Ain't it lovely? Nothing on TV to watch so you just hang around surfing the internet.

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
AvatarMember #22
December 3, 2006 1:44 pm #

hey guys, that does not really have anything to do with the subject.

Cant wait till the 5th. Looking foward to reading the rest of the next one!


Vode an

December 3, 2006 1:46 pm (Edited December 3, 2006 01:52 pm) #

Yeppers!
We're just kinda chatting, because i'm taking so Fierfek long to write the next one. :D

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
December 3, 2006 1:50 pm #

Yeah just chatting.Can't wait till the 5th either.Sunday all I do is surf the internet.my mom hates it

Sa kyr'am Nau tracyn kad, Vode an.-Forged like the saber in the fires of death,brothers all.
December 3, 2006 1:52 pm #

So does mine. They say i need to get off every once and a while. Then i'm like " Five more minutes "

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
December 3, 2006 1:55 pm #

yeah really and besides what really makes them mad is when I use my dads computer because mine is slow.

Sa kyr'am Nau tracyn kad, Vode an.-Forged like the saber in the fires of death,brothers all.
December 3, 2006 1:59 pm #

We only have on computer other than my Dad's PDA. I use it as a modem to surf with.

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
AvatarMember #22
December 3, 2006 1:59 pm #

you guys can use PM's to yap, or IM with yahoo or somthing. Good luck writing the rest. Cant wait to read the rest


Vode an

December 3, 2006 2:15 pm #

Vode an is right.Vode Darasuum ner vode

Sa kyr'am Nau tracyn kad, Vode an.-Forged like the saber in the fires of death,brothers all.
December 3, 2006 2:27 pm (Edited December 3, 2006 02:28 pm) #

That reminds me, When are you gonna email me KF?

BTW Sweet Pic!

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
December 3, 2006 2:31 pm #

Ill mail you tonight i just ran out of time last night ner vod.oh and thanks for the help on finding the pic i like yours too.Vode Darasuum.

Sa kyr'am Nau tracyn kad, Vode an.-Forged like the saber in the fires of death,brothers all.
December 3, 2006 2:37 pm #

Well, i'll be waiting.

I'm off for a little bit to go finish up my next chapter. I'll be back probably around six or six thirty. :D

Bal kote, Darasuum kote. Jorso'ran kando a tome - And glory, eternal glory, We shall bear it's weight together.
December 3, 2006 2:44 pm #

ok.Hey i just sent you that e-mail ner vod. ill talk to you later.Vode Darasuum
Vode An.

Sa kyr'am Nau tracyn kad, Vode an.-Forged like the saber in the fires of death,brothers all.

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